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[rabidsamfan]

Departure

The last time everything in Bag End had reminded him of Bilbo, but now Frodo looked around him and saw Sam. Sam was the mended chair, and the vase of chrysanthemums on the desk. Sam was the song Rosie was singing in the kitchen and the clack of the baby’s rattle, the smell of the bread, baked fresh for their journey and the sweet scent of the kingsfoil he’d planted by the window. Sam was the neatly cobbled mends in the cloak resting now on Frodo’s shoulders.

Sam was here, with the scent of ponies on him, bending to pick up the packs by the fireplace. “Are you ready, Mr. Frodo?” he asked, straightening with the burden, the pale line of the scar on his forehead barely visible under his tan and sunbleached curls.

Frodo picked up the Red Book and took one last look around.

“Yes, Sam,” he said.



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[lame-pegasus.livejournal.com]

To quote you, my dear:

Gah.

My goodness, this is like a sudden strong blow right in the middle of my solarplexus. My God, ist this good.

Sam was the song Rosie was singing in the kitchen and the clack of the baby’s rattle, the smell of the bread, baked fresh for their journey and the sweet scent of the kingsfoil he’d planted by the window. Sam was the neatly cobbled mends in the cloak resting now on Frodo’s shoulders.

Those vivid images. I can see it, I can smell it.

And...oh, how it hurts.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Well, thank you. I whittled those images down a lot to get them where I wanted them, so I'm glad they worked.

I'm contemplating changing the two dialogue lines to "Ready to go, Mr. Frodo?" and "I'm ready," but I'd lose "Sam" in the last line and I wants it there I does.

[lame-pegasus.livejournal.com]

We wantssss it, too, preciousss, oh yesss. We musssst have that "Ssssam" there.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Yesss we mussst!

[shirebound]

Oh, wow. Talk about closure, and knowing that Bag End wasn't 'home' anymore!

*hugs Frodo*

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Yeah. It's hard to think about Frodo having to say "goodbye" to the Shire and all twice, the first time thinking he might never come back and the second time knowing that he won't.

Thank you!

*goes back to cleaning apartment, feeling pleased*

[mariole.livejournal.com]

The last time everything in Bag End had reminded him of Bilbo, but now Frodo looked around him and saw Sam.

Gah! How do you do this -- slay me with a line? *weeps*

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

*offers kleenex*

I don't know. Sometimes I just hear a sentence and there it is.

[ana-stasia.livejournal.com]

Ohmigosh!! This is just...it makes my throat *ache* reading it and seeing the pictures in my head. Every single image is crystal clear; you've done a fantastic job. ::blinks away tears:: Can't cry. Then my poor throat will really hurt. Just...very, very emotionally touching and absolutely perfect, this. Thank you so much for sharing.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

You're welcome. And I hope your throat feels better soon.

[cpsings4him.livejournal.com]

I am not lying or even exaggerating when I tell you, I had tears in my eyes as I read this. To think of my Frodo leaving his home...and then to think of what it does to his Sam left standing at the havens....

Can't finish...too overcome....*wipes tears

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. *offers kleenex* The thought of those two having to part makes me ache too.

[illyria-novia.livejournal.com]

Oh, my! *whimpers* Painful in the sweetest way or lovely in the hurting way, I can't decide. I am in awe by the way you wave the memories into the sights and sounds and scents of Bag End.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I don't know why it is all my best drabbles seem to make everyone cry...

[periantari.livejournal.com]

very nice..i love all the description you have and you painted a very vivid picture of Sam in the past through Frodo's eyes... :*(
very bittersweet~
nice job. =)

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

[rosiegardener.livejournal.com]

stunningly good ! how do you do it ? *fals on knees worshipping RSF*

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

*polishes halo hastily*

I don't know. How do you keep on coming up with icons that make me drool? Yum!

Thanks!

[rosiegardener.livejournal.com]

hmm, might be that I love Sam as much as you do ? ;-)

[azur-infinie.livejournal.com]

Now that's a drabble (and a half). How did you fit all that emotion in so small a place? Am in awe!

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

You'll notice I couldn't get it down to 100 words, LoL!

I've been practicing a lot. The bulk of the drabbles are on my ff.n page (the fanfiction link off my LJ) in "Attack of the Plot Bunnies".

There's something addictive about the little buggers...as you will soon discover!

[azur-infinie.livejournal.com]

as you will soon discover!

I'm sure I will... *gulp*

And thanks for the info, I look forward to checking them out! (Is it ok if I friend you by the way?)

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Of course it is -- and I shall do the same in hopes of seeing your efforts come to fruition!

[azur-infinie.livejournal.com]

Thanks! It will give me the motivation to post something good ;)

[earendil367.livejournal.com]

It is beautiful. It shows emotion and actually takes the reader into the scene through vivid descriptions.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Oh thank you! *blush*