five hours sleep, and I wake up? What?

[rabidsamfan]

But you all benefit from a drabble. I'm not happy with the title, and it probably needs another revision but there it is.

Night in Rivendell

His hand is colder now.

It’s been cold for days, but holding it tonight is like trying to hang onto the metal handle of a pump at midnight on a winter night. The chill creeps out of him and into me, until I have to switch off hands. My fingers ache, my joints are as stiff as Dad’s and nearly as swollen, and I blow on them to try to warm them a little, but even my breath is cool now, and the blankets Lord Elrond wrapped around us don’t help much.

I wonder if we’ll both die of frostbite.



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Comments

[shirebound]

Oooh, good one. I've often thought of those long, long nights Sam endured in Rivendell. It's no wonder he was finally asleep when Frodo awoke -- he probably hadn't slept for days, just watching and waiting.

♥ Sam

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Yes, and if I get off my duff and write between laundry loads I should work on "The Master and The Servant" instead of sneaking on to LJ, but so far my industriousness is not in working order...

thanks! (How did you make the little heart?)

[shirebound]

Isn't that heart cute? Here's how to make it:

& hearts ;

(but with no spaces anywhere)

[lame-pegasus.livejournal.com]

Fine.... very good! My idea for a title would be Winter Chill (or Winter Frost), and I would change one short sentence:

...but holding it tonight is like trying to hang onto the metal handle of a pump at midnight on a winter night

into:

... but holding it tonight is like to hang onto the metal handle of a pump in the middle of a winter night.

That's a little bit more elegant, and it would still stay a drabble.

I am back on deck, Captain.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Actually, the problem I'm having is that I think it's a little too elegant in its present form. Not quite a Sam-voice yet. But how he speaks is not necessarily how he thinks, when you look at the books. His observations are much more in the "narrator" voice, even when we've shifted pretty sharply to his point of view.

Oh, well. Half the fun is in re-writing, isn't it? Well, a quarter of it, anyway.

[lame-pegasus.livejournal.com]

I wouldn't think that Sam isn't able to speak like this. Maybe he has a rather simple way of expressing himself, but that shouldn't keep him from using his words properly... or the story ends in the other extreme (some kind of weird accent or dialect I found in several stories now *shudders*).

But it's your Sam.

[mariole.livejournal.com]

the metal handle of a pump at midnight on a winter night.

Ooh, I felt that. *shivers* Very nice.

I did the "no sleep" thing last night. In my case, I blamed it on the full moon, and my being a water creature. Hope you sleep well tonight!

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Blaming no sleep on Alan Rickman is much more fun.

*grin*


Thanks!

[girlofring.livejournal.com]

touching scene between Frodo and Sam. It really describes the sensation that the feeling of the Nazgul Blade is to Frodo tenfold, passing it onto Sam.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. It's been chilly here at night, in spite of the date on the calendar, and it reminded me of how miserable being cold can make you -- the Ringwraiths' cold is a different quality, but in some way it must be far worse.

[tialys.livejournal.com]

I wonder if we'll both die of frostbite.

That very... Sam. Excellent job. I loved it.

...Tialys

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[ancalime8301]

Ooh, nice... :) I don't really have much in the way of constructive comments, I'm afraid... though perhaps you could have the title be something about cold? Since that's what the drabble's about and all. :p (But I'm also terrible with titles, so take that with a grain of salt. ;))

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. People seem to like it the way it is, so I'm gradually warming to it. Still can't think of a satisfactory title tho...

[luv2hobbits.livejournal.com]

That is so scary/sweet/creepy/loving/sad.
I love how he thinks not of the ringwraith, but of frostbite.

[rabidsamfan.livejournal.com]

Thank you. (I love your list of adjectives!)

[luv2hobbits.livejournal.com]

I had to tear my hands away from the keyboard...otherwise that list would be pages worth of complimenting adjectives!!
/enjoyable/creative/intriguing/interesting/....
*starts fighting with hands the way pippin did with the palantir*
*falls of floor*